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Mysterious girl playing with my heart

Postby Tar-Herunole » Tue Mar 09, 2004 11:41 am

Long ago, I wrote this around 10 years ago for a girl I was in love with (or at least I thought I was!, youth makes you feel things much strongly!). After one month of an ideal relationship, most of the time reading Tolkien, listening to U2 or sleeping in the tower of a castle under the starfull bavarian summer sky, one day she stopped suddenly seeing me. I was so confused, and I wrote this:

Precious dark stones, her lovely brown eyes,
Amazing beauty in all of her lines
Obscure misteries that cover her mind
Leaving my heart broke and painfully blind
Attempting to believe someone's ancient lie.

Well... there is an enigma associated... And the enigma is not the end of the story, as everyone should know after CC's proclamation :p that I am single. The enigma is... What was the name of the girl? If you know it, reply in the Contest cooler!
http://www.frostjedi.com/phpbb/viewtopic.php?p=70806#70806

Of course comments about my poor art are welcomed in this thread! Also if you wanna know I can tell you why the girl stopped seeing me.
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Postby chaotic century » Tue Mar 09, 2004 7:59 pm

again im very sorry that was very rude n inconsiderate of me. but i like ur poem its very good
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Postby Tar-Herunole » Tue Mar 09, 2004 11:31 pm

not that rude.. I was kidding! I am very ok about it. It's part of the past and I have very good relationship with my ex-gf! :p :D
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Postby Ninja2516 » Wed Mar 10, 2004 2:04 am

What happened man?! Im intrigued now!
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Postby Tar-Herunole » Wed Mar 10, 2004 2:17 am

HAHA
Ninja used his Ninja powers to spy me and decipher this poem is an acrostic, meaning that the first letter of each line make a word... PAOLA!

She was italian. She was a little older than me and when I met her she said that she did not believe in love because she have had bad experiences. But still we had great times hanging around together.
One day she decided she was falling in love with me, although we both knew we would have to depart after summer, her to Italy, me to Spain. And she thought that was dangerous.
So she didn't want to face me to tell me that... she both felt to proud to confess she was feeling love, and too weak to be able to say it to my face and keep her decision...
So I was very confused but Kept on stalking her with poems and other things until one day I got her to the tower of the castle at night... there she could not escape and she told me her secret...
After that, as she had foreseen she was not able to keep her determination, so we came back together...
Unfortunately time was inexorable and at the end of the summer, we said goodbye... for many years we kept on exchanging long letters (at that time there were no e-mail LOL!) and now she is nothing but a very nice memory
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Postby ChatOmbre » Wed Mar 10, 2004 3:35 am

I like your poem, and it's story is nice too. :)
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Postby chaotic century » Wed Mar 10, 2004 8:40 pm

im glad i did not offend u i seem to b doing that alot these days. mreh o well nice poem! :thumbs:
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Postby Tar-Herunole » Wed Mar 10, 2004 10:28 pm

I am glad you like them. It's a pity you cannot hear declamated, as I believe part of its best it's its rythm.... maybe if you try to say it aloud, pausing after:
stones, beauty, misteries, broke, believe
sounds better!
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Postby Kaos » Wed Mar 10, 2004 11:44 pm

its beautiful. but so sad. =[ bittersweeeet ;-;
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Postby Murphy » Mon Mar 15, 2004 9:39 am

Nice Herunole! ^_^ dunno what to say but it beatuful (sad to)
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Postby xiaoliang » Thu Nov 26, 2009 9:44 am

yea!so so! :banana :banana :banana
Murphy wrote:Nice Herunole! ^_^ dunno what to say but it beatuful (sad to)
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Re: Mysterious girl playing with my heart

Postby Drazo » Mon Dec 07, 2009 3:45 pm

This thread has been dead for over 5 years and most posters in here have long since left. Posting "yea!so so!", a bunch of smilies and a quote is not a good reason to revive it.
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