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This feeling

Postby Rao » Fri Apr 30, 2004 2:19 am

Well morning came and
it dressed the sky in a lovely, yellow gown.
Now the shops they are all opening
in that narrow hallway of downtown.

It's filled with people who are shopping
for their lovers and their friends, saying "I won't ever be lonely again."

Now a forest fenced
becomes backyards like songs are born from sound.
And an Apple felland it taught us all
we are chained here to the ground.

So, I mean, here we go, but there ain't no escape.
These streets are just dead ends.
So I won't ever be happy again.
Now it seems that you too see a painful blue when you stare into the sky.

You could never understand the movement of a hand waving goodbye.
But as the story goes, or it is often told,
a new day will arise and all the dance halls will be full
of skeletons that are coming back to life.

And on a grassy hill the
Lion will lay down with the Lamb and I won't ever be lonely again. But
until that time I think I had better find some disbelief to suspend,
because I don't want to feel like this again.
Tell the Spartans, Stranger passing by,
That here, Obedient to their laws, We lie,
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Postby Kaos » Sun May 02, 2004 8:10 pm

this poem is sadly sweet. i got the impression of ignorant bliss, with the line "and i won't ever be lonely again"

it leaves a pleasant reminder that everything is fragile and will in time crumble no matter what.

hehe, i was touched by your poem. great job :)
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Postby chaotic century » Sun May 02, 2004 11:34 pm

wow how did u get that from that? lol i thought it was great as usaul a lil confusing couse im not sure what ur talking bout but its good
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Postby Dev » Sun May 02, 2004 11:51 pm

Wow..... I think I should write that in my brother's notebook and tell him it's an example of what a good poem should be like. BUT! If he does write it and claim it as his own A.K.A Playjerism ill kick his booty until it becomes red :) ^_^
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Postby Neerowolf » Mon May 03, 2004 9:15 pm

Weird. It sounds nice and then it gets sorrowful, and then it gets blah. Not bad, just devoid of alot of emotion.
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