My last attempt to put away my sadness

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My last attempt to put away my sadness

Postby Rao » Thu Feb 05, 2004 12:17 am

Tomorrow when I wake up Im finding my brother
and making him take me back down to the water.
That lake where we sailed and laughed with our father.
I will not desert him. I will not desert him.

No matter how I may wish for a coffin so clean
or these trees to undress all their leaves onto me.
I put my face in the dirt and then finally I see
the sky that has been avoiding me.

I started this letter Im going to send it to Ruba.
It will be blessed by her eyes on the gulf coast of Florida.
With her feet in the sand and one hand on her swimsuit,
she will recite the prayer of my pen.

Saying, ..time take us forward. Relief from this longing,
they can land that plane on my heart I don?t care
just give me November,
the warmth of a whisper in the freezing darkness of my room.

But no matter what I would do in an attempt to replace.
All the pills that I take trying to balance my brain.
I have seen the curious girl with that look on her face.
So surprised she stares out from her display case.


I'm sorry if you read these.
Tell the Spartans, Stranger passing by,
That here, Obedient to their laws, We lie,
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Postby Wolfie » Thu Feb 05, 2004 12:23 am

aww
ЀA†H comes like £iƒε,
sometimes forced and unwanted and sometimes loved and longed for.
How will you Ði€?™
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Re: My last attempt to put away my sadness

Postby ChatOmbre » Thu Feb 05, 2004 1:58 am

Rao wrote:But no matter what I would do in an attempt to replace.
All the pills that I take trying to balance my brain.
I have seen the curious girl with that look on her face.
So surprised she stares out from her display case.


^my favorite part. these are lovely...
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Postby Kaos » Thu Feb 05, 2004 4:38 am

your poems are really good. you've quite a talent. you're in a band correct? are you/did you ever consider singing any of them?

oh and
the warmth of a whisper in the freezing darkness of my room.

that line is just..brilliant. like what i once took a whole poem to say, you've gotten in one sentence. brilliant :lila
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Postby Rao » Fri Feb 06, 2004 1:18 am

I do sing them, if i knew how to get them on here, i would put them on for all to hear.
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Postby chaotic century » Fri Feb 06, 2004 1:37 am

that would b very awesome muy caliente! hehe
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Postby Murphy » Fri Feb 06, 2004 10:13 am

Again its WONDERFULL.. like kaos said that sentence is brilliant! i would also very much like to hear your music..
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