My destroyed happiness

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My destroyed happiness

Postby Rao » Wed Feb 04, 2004 4:18 am

The phone slips from a loose grip
Words were missed then some apology
I didn't want to tell you this
it's just some guys she has been hanging out with
oh I don't know the past couple of weeks I guess.
Thank you and hang up the phone.

Let the funeral start.
Hear the casket close. Lets pin a split-black ribbon onto your overcoat.
Still laughter pours from under doors in this house.
I dont understand that sound no more.
It seems artificial like a T.V. set.

Haligh, Haligh, Haligh, Haligh this weight it must be satisfied.
You offer only one reply.
You know not what you do.
But you tear and tear your hair from roots.
From that same head you have twice removed
a lock of hair you said would prove our love would never die.

Well ha ha ha.

But I remember everything the words we spoke on freezing South street.
And all those morning watching you get ready for school.

You combed your hair inside that mirror.
The one you painted blue and glued with jewelry tears.
Something about those bright colors always made you feel better.

So now we speak with ruined tongues and the words we say aren't? meant for anyone.
It's just a mumbled sentence to a passing acquaintance,
but there was once you said you hated my suffering
and you understood and you'd take care of me.
You would always be there, well where are you now?

Haligh, Haligh, Haligh, Haligh, the plans were never finalized
but left to hang like yarn and twice dangling before my eyes.
As you tear and tear your hair from roots,
from that same head that you have twice removed a lock of hair
you said would prove that our love would never die.


As I sing and sing of awful things,
the pleasure that my sadness brings as my fingers press onto the strings you get another clumsy chord.
Haligh, Haligh, an awful lie. This weight will now be satisfied.
I will give you only one reply,
I know not who I am

but I talk in the mirror to the stranger that appears.
Our conversations are circles and always one sided, nothing is clear.
Except we keep coming back to this meaning that I lack.
He says the choices were given and now I must live them or just not live, but do you want that?
Tell the Spartans, Stranger passing by,
That here, Obedient to their laws, We lie,
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Postby Tar-Herunole » Wed Feb 04, 2004 11:49 am

I really hope Rao you did write this long ago... It's beautiful but terrible. I like it very much. I think it has a lot of feeling and of truth, but I hope it's not based in a recent experience.
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Postby ChatOmbre » Wed Feb 04, 2004 6:11 pm

I don't really know what to say about it. it's a good song (poem?), though. I think the best word for it would be "bittersweet".
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Postby Tar-Herunole » Wed Feb 04, 2004 6:39 pm

Really... I am afraid I can only feel the bitterness
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Postby Rao » Wed Feb 04, 2004 10:20 pm

Yes, it is a recent experience.
Tell the Spartans, Stranger passing by,
That here, Obedient to their laws, We lie,
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Postby Wolfie » Wed Feb 04, 2004 11:07 pm

ohh, well its nice either way, *hugs*
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Postby Kaos » Wed Feb 04, 2004 11:37 pm

oh no *hugs Rao* the bit is extremely heartfelt and deep. i like it but it's so sad. so very sad. ...i like the part with the mirror, the way you described it. i could almost see it for myself. ;-; i love it...
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Postby Murphy » Fri Feb 06, 2004 9:53 am

:( where do you get everything from? U hanlde words soo good.... its sooo sad, yet sooo beautiful..
Nice work RAO!
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Postby Rao » Fri Feb 13, 2004 6:09 pm

I am disappointed all of you overlooked this song, It is the favorite among the people in my town. :(
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Postby ChatOmbre » Fri Feb 13, 2004 6:51 pm

I'm sorry that you feel we've over looked it. why do you think we have?
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Postby Wolfie » Fri Feb 13, 2004 9:11 pm

i think its wonderul :) but it doesnt mean it doesnt make me sad
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Postby Rao » Sat Feb 21, 2004 8:32 pm

Everything makes people sad, it just depends on what scale.
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Postby Wolfie » Sat Feb 21, 2004 10:55 pm

heh, true....
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Postby chaotic century » Mon Feb 23, 2004 11:02 pm

mreh once u hear it in music it wont sound that sad but since it seems like poem here its sad. but its great i like it alot just like i think all ur songs r awesome!
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