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Suicide and Rape

Postby SuicidalButterfly » Tue Oct 07, 2003 12:06 am

He loved you from the first time he saw you.
You didn't know he existed,
Not until that night.

He grew tired of the way you ignored him.
Did he know that if he'd tried to do things right,
You'dve loved him just the same?
Not after that night.

He became so angry.
It was not your fault.
He grabbed his gun,
Forced you on the bed.
Don't blame yourself, dear girl.
He gently undressed you,
Caressing your sacred skin,
Kissing you.
It was the wrong way.
He forced himself unto you.

This feeling of dishonour,
The way you cried.
It's not your fault.
This feeling you cannot describe.
How would you know he was thinking these thoughts?
Choked and strangled by emotion,
But it won't go away.

He couldn't believe
How he'd hurt you that night.
But the hurt he'd caused, could not be concieved.
Couldn't bring himself to live another moment.
He didn't deserve to live,
Not after causing you such torment.
He pulled the gun to his own head
Thinking he only deserved to be dead.

The anger blinding you,
The way you have to live with this affliction,
The way he gave up so readily.
The way death became your addiction.
You are still pure.
It's not your fault.

He pulled the trigger...
And blankness filled the room,
With the heaviness of torture lingering with doom.

Don't be driven to your end,
Dear friend.
The noose looks so inviting.
Is this worth ending your life?
Let your life go on-keep striving.
You are still pure, still innocent.
You slip your head through,
Just kick the chair...only gravity will help me now...
The end of your life was not yet due.
You were still innocent.
You were still pure.

I honestly don't know why I wrote this. I have a friend who was raped, no suicide though. I guess that is what sprung the idea. hmmm...I'd appreciate anyone's input as long as it is constructive. :D
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Postby Neerowolf » Tue Oct 07, 2003 12:34 am

It sounds like a true story, and although the subject is depressing, I still think its really well done. Good job.
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Postby Kaos » Tue Oct 07, 2003 12:52 am

I think it's terrifyingly deep o.o (in a good way of course ;) )

But, the theme is very suggestive and the poem is slightly too descriptive =[
Since your new (and i've never really had a thread like this before :oops: ) i won't lock it, just informing you to tone down the 'descriptivness' :D

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Postby SuicidalButterfly » Tue Oct 07, 2003 1:53 am

Oh :heh.

It isn't true. OK. Nope. No truth to it.
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Postby ChatOmbre » Tue Oct 07, 2003 2:36 pm

o.o Wow. I think you did a great job writing it, and like Kaos said, it's terrifyingly deep. Kind of creepy...
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Postby Sonic speed » Sun Oct 19, 2003 2:34 am

:cry: it was really good
may i kill any thing i see or hear and sonic spin forums is gay god
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Postby SuicidalButterfly » Wed Nov 26, 2003 3:22 pm

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